改寫的技巧

關于改寫的技巧

　　要說搜集句子，首先要有一個堅強的后盾，那么這些后盾從哪里來呢？

　　這要看你需要什么句子，如果是找每一段開篇點題的句子，最好還是找一些文學性比較強的東西，比如說一些給白領看的經濟類文章，我們經常提到了的[經濟學人].The.Economist.就屬此類。要想尋找經濟學家的話最好還是去verycd這個網站http://www.verycd.com/topics/2727001/ 這里就是一個很好的選擇。比如說無老師就從2008年11月15日這一期的第12頁找到了一個很好的句子，很適合當文章的開頭。Asked what China will do to rescue the world from financial turmoil, its officials these days have a boilerplate answer：its greatest contribution will be to keep its own economy running smoothly.我們把它放在Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.這個作文題目之下，就可以改寫成Asked what teachers will do to improve their students, the response in high schools have a boilerplate answer：the greatest contribution of homework will be to keep its their students appreciating their knowledge entirely.

　　那么我們提煉一下Asked what …… will do to ……, the response in …… have a boilerplate answer：the greatest contribution of …… will be to keep its their …….就是一個十分優秀的作文開頭模板。

　　我們也可以從同樣是2008年11月15日這一期的120頁找到Further evidence of emerging markets’ potential comes from the experience of Britain’s AstraZeneca in China.這一句只要稍加修改就可以變成一個非常優秀的.2-4段的段落開頭，首先把他模板化Further evidence of …… comes from the experience of …… in …….然后再加入一點倒裝句式來證明我們的文學水平Not only does ……come from the experience of …… in ……., but (also) evidence of ……subsequently(further) prove……這樣一個優秀的論證段的段首句模板就完成了。

　　至于例子的模板，那么就是新聞的天下了，我們仍然可以在《經濟學人The.Economist》里面尋找。比如說找到了這么一句話South Korea’s capital city now has been named their most favored travel destination two years in row, according to the report, as 11.4 percent of the Chinese, 9.8 percent of the Japanese, and an overwhelming 20.0 percent of the Thai expressed their preference for Seoul, toppling cities like Tokyo, Paris and Honolulu in the survey. 這里面我們就可以把這個句子直接提煉為模板…… now has been named their most favored …… two years in row, according to the report, as 11.4 percent of the ……, 9.8 percent of the ……, and an overwhelming 20.0 percent of the …… expressed their preference for ……, toppling cities like …, … and … in the survey.相識的數字，加上確鑿的低點，一切顯得都是那么無可辯駁，但是實際上這就是一個模板。

　　當然我們不肯能每一個句子都是這么長，因此我們可以加入很多For example, Therefore, 所引導的句子來增強文章內部的節奏感，使得讀者不會感覺到過于疲憊。

　　至于末段的模板則是有一些講究的，但是當無老師看了無數篇作文和《經濟學人The.Economist》的文章之后，無老師開始反思我們很多學生寫的“ After ruminating over all these factors, ”“It is more advantageous for us to make decision alone,”“As far as I am concerned, I come to the notion that”這類作文結尾，是否是一種符合歐美人思維的文章，因為你只要稍微把經濟學人的文章找幾篇文章的結尾看一下就會知道，其實這里面絕大多數時候，都是以羅列多方